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Original message:126 days 15 hours 47 minutes ago
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I was hurt extremely bad when I wrote this and to this day I feel like I need to make something of it

So if somebody could write me a dark,almost scary backing track i would love to turn this into a song

Im thinking a fast heavy song with alot of double kicks. Something like classic Slipknot. Something with a good metal sound and a screaming solo please omg that would be awesome!!!!

My soul is a black flame made of the burning souls of the damned and the suffering
it burns hotter and darker each day with a new bodies to add to the fire
smoke and ash made of souls begging for mercy suffocate me and drag me to hell
there is no light down there,only the blackness i've been begging to embrace
the searing pain makes me smile because I am familiar with its cold grip on my throat,
It is not hot in hell oh no no its cold and smells of rotting flesh and demon souls a smell i've come to love,
the devil is a powerful man,with the most vicious soul piercing gaze but beyond that gaze is a soul as black as mine,
behind those eyes lies a heart filled with so much hatred and suffering,
I open my eyes and see that it is but a reflection of me,
I gaze deeply into my eyes and see nothing but black,my mind has been polluted by the putrid suffering I have endured,
my heart is so cold,and my soul is falling deeply into the abyss,please do not save me,for I wished for this.
Reply:126 days 11 hours 9 minutes ago
Member: Steve Aguilar
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Sounds like potential, can you organize it for a song, and what about a good hook or chorus ,something like for it?

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Reply:126 days 10 hours 15 minutes ago
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If I may be so bold as to ask, who hurt you, and what type of music do they listen to?
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Reply:126 days 6 hours 58 minutes ago
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Im one of a kind!

"So if somebody could write me a dark,almost scary backing track i would love to turn this into a song."

You don't need anyone else to write it. Do it yourself. Tune your guitar way lower than standard. Crank up any distorted power chords... literally any combination of power chords will do... and scream these lyrics with extreme anger and bitterness. That's how it's done.

Life hurts.
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Reply:126 days 3 hours 1 minutes ago
Member: Greg D
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I agree with Mr T. He ain't no fool!
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Reply:126 days 1 hours 39 minutes ago
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I definitely would but like idk I never have time. I have maybe 30 minutes a day to put towards guitar work and stuff like that and most of the time im doing vocal stuff so I never have time thats why I came here. And im also trying to promote the "get out of your comfort zone" aspect to see how well people do I mean you may surprise yourself. And im also trying to get into the whole collab thing and I need some help laying this baby down. I think we can make something awesome out of this if we at least try it.
Reply:126 days 2 minutes ago
Member: David Zaldivar
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First - it's WEIRD to hear slipknot and "classic" being used in the same sentence.

Second - how do you sing it? Do you have a melody or rhythm in mind? Seems like whoever sings this is gonna have a mouth full..
Reply:125 days 22 hours 36 minutes ago
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I know how its gonna be sung cause im singing it and I have it in my head. I hear a Slipknot type heavy fast powerful backround track. I really want to get this down cause this seems like it could really be awesome. Im gonna throw in a chorus and make the lyrics melodic.
Reply:125 days 16 hours 37 minutes ago
Member: Joseph
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i would totally make a back track to the song but my recording equipment isnt up to standards unless u want a very weird sketchy sound wish i knew how to mic my amp but yah i can see playing this and just going crazy on it haha seems like good heavy headbanging fun
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Reply:125 days 16 hours 5 minutes ago
Member: Isla King
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I only began studying classical guitar! and that's cool! think all agree with me????
Reply:125 days 15 hours 49 minutes ago
Member: farlow
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Hello Isla king and welcome to guitar.com. How long have you been playing?

@Joseph: what recording gear or software do you have?
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Reply:124 days 23 hours 12 minutes ago
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an m audio box haha really sucks maybe its cause i dont have the right program
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Reply:125 days 1 hours 29 minutes ago
Member: Im one of a kind
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Anything is fine with me just give me what you got and ill work with it maybe throw my own stuff on there ill defnitely be adding vocals
Reply:124 days 8 hours 51 minutes ago
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I think the chorus should revolve around the words "I wished for this".




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Reply:124 days 4 hours 40 minutes ago
Member: David Zaldivar
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Is there any way you could record the vocals so we can hear what you have in mind? If you have an idea how it's going to go and "hear it in your head," then show us..
Reply:124 days ago
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Okay I found a good example

In Flames-Take This Life

Except heavier and with small bridges

Ill probably revise the lyrics to make it more into a song cause that was just a release you know
Reply:123 days 23 hours 56 minutes ago
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Oh and another good example is

As I Lay Dying-An Ocean Between Us
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